Question

假設(shè)你是某健康雜志的醫(yī)學(xué)顧問Dr White，一名叫李明的中學(xué)生來信說，他所在班級(jí)近視的學(xué)生超過總數(shù)的一半，而且大多數(shù)學(xué)生的視力越來越差，她感到非常擔(dān)心。請(qǐng)你針對(duì)她所說的情況，結(jié)合下面要點(diǎn)，用英語給李華回信，告訴她應(yīng)該如何保護(hù)視力。
堅(jiān)持做眼保健操
定期做視力檢查
臥床或乘車時(shí)不要看書
不要用手揉眼睛
如無必要，不要戴有色眼鏡。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)使行文連貫；
3．開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Li Ming,
You’re very kind to care about your classmates.                                     
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Yours,
Dr. White

Answer 1

Dear Li Ming,
You’re very kind to care about your classmates. It is important for everyone to keep good eyesight. Now I will give you some advice on how to protect your eyesight.
To begin with, don't keep your eyes working for a long time. You'd better have a rest by looking in the long distance after you have studied an hour or so.
Then, pay attention to the following: Don't read in the sun or in a poor light; don't read in bed or in a moving bus. And when you read you should keep the book away from your eyes for about a foot.
Furthermore, do eye-exercises every day. It will also help you keep good eyesight.
And finally, you’d better not rub your eyes with your hands; and it is bad for your eyesight if you wear colored glasses.
I hope my advice will be helpful to you and your classmates.

試題分析：提綱作文要求考生根據(jù)所給的寫作要求和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開寫作。要求考生在保證內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全部概括的基礎(chǔ)上可以充分發(fā)揮自己的想象，進(jìn)而用自己的語言來表達(dá)某種觀點(diǎn)或看法，增添了寫作的靈活性，同時(shí)能較好地考查考生的想象能力和英語語言表達(dá)能力。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。