Question

假如你是李華,Jane 是美國(guó)人。在她暑假來(lái)中國(guó)游玩時(shí)你們相識(shí),并成為好朋友。Jane回國(guó)后,你很想念她,于是給她寫了一封信,并且和她談了你對(duì)高一新生活的感受。信頭信尾均已給出；詞數(shù)100左右。
Dear Jane,
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Yours sincerely,
Xiaohua

Answer 1

Dear Jane,
How’s everything going? I’m so glad to have met you and become friends with you. I miss you very much after you left China and thus I am writing this letter to tell you something about me. I entered senior high school in September. The school is very beautiful and I feel that the new life is very exciting and full of challenges. My teachers and classmates are all very kind. I have decided to try my best to learn a lot from them. Of course, I will also do more exercise to keep fit.
Give my best regards to your parents and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Xiaohua

試題分析：本文是一篇開(kāi)放作文，給李華寫一封信,并且和她談了你對(duì)高一新生活的感受，并沒(méi)有給出什么要點(diǎn)要求學(xué)生結(jié)合滋生的實(shí)際情況寫作，在行文中，要注意多用些高級(jí)句型和詞匯，我們可適當(dāng)增加連貫詞，以使行文連貫。范文中就使用了合理的連詞和較高級(jí)的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，增色不少。
寫作亮點(diǎn)：I miss you very much after you left China and thus I am writing this letter to tell you something about me.和The school is very beautiful and I feel that the new life is very exciting and full of challenges.這兩句，使文章渾然一體。同時(shí)文章中使用了適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使用文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，渾然一體。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：書(shū)面表達(dá)中的寫信類作文，我們首先要完整的正確的表達(dá)出所有的寫作要點(diǎn)。在寫作中，如果語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)好的話，多用較高級(jí)語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，這樣可以使文章增色不少。同時(shí)要合理的使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，這樣文章才能結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，渾然一體。