Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
A young man was slapped in the face until he bled because he didn’t offer his seat to a woman with a baby on a bus in downtown Hangzhou. Later he was proved to be a disabled person.
In a series of cases nationwide, we see people being beaten for refusing to give up their seats on public transport, which seems to be a moral problem about correct behavior and self-sacrifice.
People with moral deficiency (who don’t give up their seats to deserving people) can be condemned, but they don’t deserve to be treated with violence because they offend moral values and not laws. In comparison, the attackers behave worse.
The attackers regard relying on violence as their only choice if people ignore their appeals to give up their seats. It seems they start a shout or a fight for the sake of justice, but can they still think of their personal intention when they call violence justice?
This “violent justice” can confuse many people and encourage them to do the same, especially when we are overpowered by illogical mood.
If cruel and rude acts are rooted in children’s hearts, society will never step into civilization. The practice violates common values, neither solving problems nor safeguarding civilized society.
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1、以約30個詞概括短文的要點(diǎn)。
2、以約120個詞談?wù)勀銓�這一事件的看法，內(nèi)容包括：
1）讀完這則新聞，你有什么感受？
2）假如你是車上的一名乘客，你會怎樣做？
3）就如何創(chuàng)建和諧社會提出你的建議。
【寫作要求】
你可以使用實例或其它論述方法支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子。
【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

The news is about a young disabled man attacked on a bus for not offering his seat to a woman with a baby, which leads a debate about who is right and who is wrong.
I am so upset that in our society the woman with a baby should be so implite. it was wrong of her to get her justice with violence, which really will do great harm to our society.
Today in our society ,many other people like her would take it for granted that they should be offered a seat on the crowded bus, as the morality requires. However, it I were a passenger on the crowded bus, I would stand out to tell her that the young man is also in need of help because of his disability。So it is still a long way for us to build up a harmonious society. i my opinion, we should fight against the violent justice and try every means to avoid it from happening so as to solve such kind of problems an safeguard our civilized society

試題分析：這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容包括：（1）讀完這則新聞，你有什么感受？ 2）假如你是車上的一名乘客，你會怎樣做？ 3）就如何創(chuàng)建和諧社會提出你的建議。這道題目要求比較嚴(yán)格，所以在寫作之前一定要看清題目。題目還要求你可以使用實例或其它論述方法支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子。寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
點(diǎn)評：本文屬于根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容寫作，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。