Question

假設(shè)你是李華, 因家庭貧困, 就讀高中以來一直受到美國友人Carter先生的熱心資助。新年來臨之際, 請(qǐng)給遠(yuǎn)在美國的Carter先生寫一封信, 信中包括：
1.問候Carter先生并表達(dá)感激之情；
2.介紹自己高三以來的學(xué)習(xí)生活情況以及新年的打算；
3.祝福Carter先生, 希望他能來中國。
注意：
1.詞數(shù)120~150；
2.開頭和結(jié)尾已給出, 不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
　Mr. Carter,
How I miss you and your family! Stepping into the New Year, I’m writing to______________________
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Mr. Carter,
How I miss you and your family! Stepping into the New Year, I’m writing to express my thanks and share with you my school life and my New Year resolution.
But for your generous help, I couldn’t enjoy a wonderful school life now. I’m on good terms with the teachers and my fellow classmates here. Also, I am getting along well with my study. Actually, I’m making progress. Ever since Senior Three, I’ve been working harder. My goal is to major in physics, which I’m always fascinated with, so I will spare no effort to be admitted into my dream university in the New Year. I want to pass your kindness on by devoting myself to the world of science.
Words seem to fail me every time I try to express my thanks to you , and I’ll keep my promise and not let you down. Please be my guest anytime at your convenience. Wish you and your family good health and lots of happiness in the New Year!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：題目是常見的書信作文，要求寫一封感謝信，向美國友人Carter先生表達(dá)謝意。寫作要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，寫作時(shí)必須全部包含在內(nèi)。首先向Carter先生表達(dá)感激之情；接著向他介紹自己的學(xué)習(xí)情況和新年的打算；最后祝福Carter先生并邀請(qǐng)他來中國。用第一人稱進(jìn)行寫作，注意書信格式要正確；注意單詞拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)、語法的正確使用。
亮點(diǎn)分析：范文使用了很多短語，像：on good terms with；getting along well with；making progress；spare no effort to；pass...on；devoting myself to；keep my promise；be admitted into；let you down；try to；at your convenience等，使作文顯得充實(shí)；
范文使用了一些重要的語法知識(shí)，像：虛擬語氣But for...；非限制性定語從句which I’m always fascinated with；時(shí)間狀語從句every time；不定式作表語My goal is to major in physics；wish后跟賓補(bǔ)Wish you good health等，顯示了較強(qiáng)的語法功底；
范文注意使用Also, Actually等來銜接前后句與上下文，使作文比較連貫、流暢。