Question

一個(gè)英文網(wǎng)站面向中學(xué)生征稿。請(qǐng)你寫一篇英語稿件，介紹“中秋節(jié)”及這個(gè)節(jié)日里的主要活動(dòng)。
寫作要點(diǎn)：   1.它是中國的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日之一；
2.家人團(tuán)聚；
3.賞月，吃月餅；
4.還有旅游，訪友等其他活動(dòng)。
注意： 1.  詞數(shù)100 左右；
2． 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3． 開頭語已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
參考詞匯：中秋節(jié)the Mid-Autumn Festival  農(nóng)歷 lunar calendar
賞月 enjoy the full moon        月餅 moon cake
The Mid-Autumn Festival
The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15^th of the eighth month of our Chinese lunar calendar.   

Answer 1

One possible version：
The Mid-Autumn Festival
The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15^th of the eighth month of our Chinese lunar calendar.
As one of the traditional Chinese festivals, it has been enjoying great popularity in our country. Usually, no matter how far away or how busy we are, we will try to come home for celebration. The moon that night looks the brightest in the whole lunar month. What we love most is the time we enjoy the full moon together. With the beautiful noon up in the sky, we sit together and eat moon cakes and fruit, sharing our stories. In addition to these traditional activities, we have a wider range of choices such as travelling and visiting our relatives or friends.

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)要求介紹中秋節(jié)以及在這個(gè)節(jié)日里的主要活動(dòng)。要點(diǎn)較多，在寫作時(shí)注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，同時(shí)還需要對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行細(xì)節(jié)上的補(bǔ)充，以使文章內(nèi)容豐富，上下銜接。其次，因?yàn)槭菍?duì)傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日、風(fēng)俗習(xí)慣的介紹，所以在時(shí)態(tài)選擇上要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。此外，本文屬于說明文范疇，要注意語言簡(jiǎn)練、用詞準(zhǔn)確。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，要點(diǎn)全面。文中運(yùn)用了大量的短語，比如As one of the traditional Chinese festivals；With the beautiful noon up in the sky sharing our stories；In addition to these traditional activities, 這樣不但避免了長句的繁冗晦澀，使得文章語言簡(jiǎn)練易懂，而且又起到很好的連接上下文的作用，使文章讀起來自然流暢，朗朗上口。