Question

假設(shè)學(xué)校即將舉行運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)，你將代表班級(jí)參賽。請(qǐng)參考下表中教練所制定的體能訓(xùn)練項(xiàng)目和營(yíng)養(yǎng)食譜寫一篇100字左右的英語(yǔ)短文對(duì)隊(duì)友們談?wù)勀愕挠?xùn)練計(jì)劃和你對(duì)參賽結(jié)果的預(yù)期。請(qǐng)注意勿在文中顯示真實(shí)校名。

Physical training	hours of training / increased strength-training exercise / lifting weights hours of sleep every night /8
Food	beef , meat and fish vegetables and fruit water and soft drinks
Your hopes	….

 
The school sports meet is coming soon.
 

Answer 1

One possible version：
The school sports meet is coming. I feel it so excited to compete in running for my class. Therefore, I have made a training schedule for myself.
First of all, hours of physical training should be increased to improve my speed. I will have some strength-training exercise such as lifting weights. Besides, it is necessary for me to have an eight hours’ sleep every night to stay energetic. As for food, beef, meat and fish are of great help. You’d better eat more vegetable as well as fruit which are rich in vitamins. I can drink water and soft drinks.
In a word, I’ll carry out the schedule as planned. I am sure to win a gold medal for my class.

試題分析：根據(jù)提示信息可以判斷文章應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)，使用第一人稱。而且文章需包括三個(gè)方面內(nèi)容，即介紹自己制定的體能訓(xùn)練項(xiàng)目、介紹自己制定的營(yíng)養(yǎng)食譜，最后提出自己的希望。寫作時(shí)要根據(jù)表中所列的信息進(jìn)行適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象，以使文章內(nèi)容豐滿。在希望方面可以發(fā)揮的想象是：希望隊(duì)友們嚴(yán)格按照要求進(jìn)行訓(xùn)練，希望大家在比賽中取得好成績(jī)等等。在寫作時(shí)要使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞把提示信息有效連接起來(lái)，使文章語(yǔ)言通順流暢，上下文銜接緊湊。此外，在寫作時(shí)還要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和多種句式表達(dá)，比如分詞短語(yǔ)，獨(dú)立主格等等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文短小精悍，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，要點(diǎn)全面，語(yǔ)言通順流暢，時(shí)態(tài)人稱使用正確，很好的完成了寫作任務(wù)。在謀篇布局方面作者采用了經(jīng)典的三段式，首先提出寫作目的，然后介紹自己的訓(xùn)練計(jì)劃，最后表達(dá)了自己的希望，這種結(jié)構(gòu)安排使文章脈絡(luò)清晰，一目了然。作者在文中還使用了therefore，first of all ，besides，as for，in a word等起連接作用的詞匯短語(yǔ)，使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，避免了內(nèi)容的雜亂無(wú)章。此外除了定語(yǔ)從句which are rich in vitamins.外，作者在文中大量運(yùn)用短語(yǔ)，比如不定式短語(yǔ)to stay energetic.，介詞短語(yǔ)of great help，as well as等既增添了句式結(jié)構(gòu)的變化，又給人一種清爽的感覺(jué)，使文章讀起來(lái)朗朗上口。