Question

隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展，網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物越來(lái)越受到人們的喜愛(ài)，網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的人也越來(lái)越多，請(qǐng)你談?wù)劸W(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和不足之處。
寫作要點(diǎn)：
1. 網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的優(yōu)點(diǎn)      2. 網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的缺點(diǎn)         3.你的建議
要求：
1. 短文詞數(shù)不少于100（不含已寫好的部分）。
2. 內(nèi)容充實(shí)，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，語(yǔ)意連貫。 
3. 書寫需清晰、工整。
With the rapid development of the Internet, Internet shopping is becoming a popular way of shopping. ___________________________________________________________________________________
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Answer 1

Internet shopping is a new way of shopping. It offers a number of benefits for the shoppers. The most important advantage is convenience. You can shop as you like as the on-line shops are open 24 hours a day, and you do not have to queue with other shoppers. Secondly, it is easy to find what you are looking for on the internet. Finally, it is often cheaper to buy goods through the internet.
There are disadvantages too. The main disadvantage is that you can’t actually see the products you are buying or check their quality. Also many people will miss the opportunity to talk to friends while shopping. Besides, some people are worried about paying for goods using credit cards.
In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we’d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying.

試題分析：本文屬于提綱類作文，要點(diǎn)基本上都給了出來(lái)，關(guān)于網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和不足之處，只給出了提綱，要考生自己發(fā)揮的余地很大，要考生結(jié)合自己的切身經(jīng)歷去寫。在表達(dá)要點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，請(qǐng)務(wù)必要使用連接詞把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)連接起來(lái)，如firstly, secondly Finally，also等詞，讓文章成為一個(gè)整體。在方便個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語(yǔ)讓文章更有文采。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類作文的關(guān)鍵是把握所有的要點(diǎn)，不要遺漏，要使用合適的連接詞來(lái)連接上下文，使之成為整體，適當(dāng)使用高級(jí)詞匯高級(jí)句型的利用讓文章不要那么平淡，富有變化。