Question

假設(shè)你是某市一中的學(xué)生李明，現(xiàn)在你向市長寫一封信，反映學(xué)校周邊的交通安全問題。要點(diǎn)如下：
1.學(xué)校靠近幾條主要街道，很多學(xué)生和老師得橫過街道才能進(jìn)入學(xué)校大門；
2.在交通高峰時期，車輛很多，學(xué)生過街上學(xué)不得不在車流中穿行；
3.有的家長為確保學(xué)生上學(xué)安全，每天開車送孩子,這使交通更加擁擠不堪；
4.建議政府采取措施（可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮），以免發(fā)生事故。
①詞數(shù)：100個左右
②參考詞匯：交通高峰時期rush hour，穿行thread one’s way.
③開頭已寫好，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)
Dear Mayor,
I’m a student of No.1 Middle School. Here I have something to tell you.
Yours,
Li Ming

Answer 1

Dear Mayor,                                                     
I am a student of No.1 Middle School. Here I have something important to tell you. Our school stands near some main streets, and many students as well as teachers have to cross the streets before they enter the school gate. In rush hours there are so many cars, buses and trucks going back and forth that we have to thread our way through the moving cars and buses. In order to make sure that their children are safe, some parents send their children to school with motorcycles or even private cars every day, which makes the busy streets more crowded.
I think the government should do something to improve the situation. Maybe an overpass can be built over the road to prevent the traffic accidents from happening. In addition，citizens should be encouraged to turn to public transportation like buses, BRT, which will ease traffic jams. It would be appreciated if you could take my suggestions into consideration.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Ming

試題分析：考查提綱類短文。本文的要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給了出來，考生只需要翻譯即可，難點(diǎn)在于運(yùn)用合適的詞匯和句型把要點(diǎn)的意思表達(dá)出來，可以使用多樣化的句式，如倒裝句，省略句等，讓文章更有層次。在寫作的時候要使用合適的連接詞如what’s more，on the other hand等，讓文章更流暢。
點(diǎn)評：提綱類作文的關(guān)鍵是把要點(diǎn)都要表達(dá)出來，不要有遺漏，在寫作的時候要使用合適的高級的句型，和高級的詞匯提高文章的層次，也要使用連接詞來連接全文。