Question

每位同學(xué)都希望自己具有良好的人際關(guān)系，成為班級中受歡迎的人。請你根據(jù)下表所提供的信息，寫一篇題為“Being a Popular Student”的英語短文，參加學(xué)校網(wǎng)站英語論壇的討論。

受人喜愛的 個性品質(zhì)	對待集體	熱心班級活動，具有團(tuán)隊(duì)精神，工作負(fù)責(zé)
	對待他人	尊重、關(guān)心他人，富有同情心，……
	對待自己	（請考生自己擬定內(nèi)容，列舉至少兩點(diǎn)）……

注意：1．短文必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．短文標(biāo)題與開頭已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；3．詞數(shù)：150左右。
Being a Popular Student
We all hope to be popular with our classmates and teachers.
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Answer 1

One possible version:
Being a Popular Student
We all hope to be popular with our classmates and teachers .To enjoy popularity , we are supposed to regard the class as our big family and try our best to take an active part in all our class activities. We should be responsible for the work and keep teamwork spirit in mind.
To be a popular student , we must show our respect , concern and sympathy for others .As a result , we never hesitate to lend a hand to those in need .
To be a popular student , we ought to be strict with ourselves in everything we do at school and make an effort to achieve all –round development , being good not only at our lessons but also at sports , music , painting , social services and so on .In time of success we remain modest , while in time of difficulty we keep strong –minded.
All in all, being a popular student among the classmates and teachers comes naturally to those who keep improving their personal qualities.

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)是要求寫一篇題目為“Being a popular student ”的討論稿。寫作內(nèi)容貼近學(xué)生生活，也反映了每個同學(xué)的內(nèi)心愿望，所以同學(xué)們寫起來應(yīng)該是得心應(yīng)手。但是寫作時要注意以下幾個方面：一 文章要點(diǎn)較多，注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)。二 從段落安排上可以把要求的三個方面分三段來寫，恰當(dāng)使用關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章層次分明，條理清楚。三 寫作時注意恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂妹�詞，代詞單復(fù)數(shù)形式和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號，以免給人內(nèi)容含混不清的感覺。四 文章內(nèi)容屬于發(fā)表個人觀點(diǎn)，看法，所以可以用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文在語言表達(dá)上清晰流暢，而且要點(diǎn)全面。在段落安排上用三個不定式短語分別引出對集體，對他人，對自己三個方面，使文章層次分明，條理清晰。此外連接詞的恰當(dāng)使用也是本文的一大亮點(diǎn)，比如： not only… but also， while in time of difficulty；all in all ，as a result 等。不僅如此，文中出現(xiàn)的大量短語be popular with, take an active part in, regard .. as , make an effort to ,In time of success ，lend a hand to sb不僅反映出作者詞匯的豐富，而且也使文章更加簡潔明了，清晰易懂。總之這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。