Question

請(qǐng)按照下面的提示，以“My problem”為題，寫一篇小短文，80字左右：
我是一名九年級(jí)學(xué)生，業(yè)余愛好是畫畫。但我總是很忙，沒有足夠的時(shí)間來(lái)做我喜歡做的事。事實(shí)上，許多同齡人也感到壓力很大，主要原因是作業(yè)太多。我們經(jīng)常不知道什么時(shí)候該學(xué)習(xí)，什么時(shí)候該玩。我只好放棄我的愛好。不知你是否遇到相同的問題？你是如何處理的？

Answer 1

　My problem
I’m a Grade 9 student. I enjoy painting very much. However, I’m very busy and I usually cannot find enough time to do the things I like to do. In fact, many students of my age feel stressed. One main cause of stress is too much homework. We do not know when to work and when to play. I can’t achieve a balance between the two. So I have to give up my hobby. Do you have the same problem? How do you deal with it?

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。材料中已經(jīng)給出了要寫的內(nèi)容。在寫作時(shí)，要組織好語(yǔ)言，將內(nèi)容陳述清楚。并要注意句子之間的銜接，合理的利用連詞。另外可以適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍��?fù)雜的句子，例如掌握好了的定語(yǔ)從句等�？梢允刮恼赂�有亮點(diǎn)。
【亮點(diǎn)分析】這篇文章緊扣材料，表述準(zhǔn)確流暢。文中有很多精彩的短語(yǔ)和句子。例如：However, I’m very busy and I usually cannot find enough time to do the things I like to do.然而，我很忙，經(jīng)常沒有時(shí)間做我喜歡的事情。However然而，連詞的使用使文章更富有邏輯；I like to do定語(yǔ)從句，修飾things; too much太多；We do not know when to work and when to play.我們不知道什么時(shí)候?qū)W習(xí)什么時(shí)候玩，句中出現(xiàn)了兩個(gè)并列的賓語(yǔ)從句。Give up放棄；deal with解決，等等。