Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿(mǎn)分15分）
假如你是一名九年級(jí)學(xué)生李林， 你剛認(rèn)識(shí)的美國(guó)筆友Mike想了解你的情況。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格所提供的信息給他寫(xiě)一封郵件介紹你自己。
注意：內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含所給信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。詞數(shù)80左右。郵件開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

星座	巨蟹座 ( Cancer)
個(gè)性特征	善良，隨和，喜歡暖色……
愛(ài)好	看電影，戶(hù)外運(yùn)動(dòng)
煩惱	父母要求嚴(yán), 作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，經(jīng)常感到疲倦，沒(méi)有時(shí)間做自己喜歡做的事
解決方法	聽(tīng)音樂(lè)，和朋友聊天
愿望	作業(yè)少一些，盼望寒假里有足夠的時(shí)間放松自己……

Dear Mike,
My name is Li Lin. I am a Grade 9 student.  ___________________________
                                                                          
                                                                          
What about you? Can you tell me more about your school life? I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Lin

Answer 1

Dear Mike,
My name is Li Lin. I’m a student of Grade 9. My star sign is Cancer. I’m a kind and easy-going person. I like warm colours such as orange and yellow, because they can bring me success and cheer me up. I love watching films and I like outdoor activities. But my parents are strict with me in my study and I always have a lot of homework every day, so I have no time to do what I want to do. I often feel tired and sleepy. But I have my own ways to deal with these problems, for example, I listen to music and chat with my friends in my free time. I hope I will have less homework and I’m looking forward to having enough time to relax myself during the winter holidays.
What about you? Can you tell me more about your school life? I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Lin

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，要求寫(xiě)一篇介紹自己的短文。題目中給出的材料較為詳細(xì)，動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容組織語(yǔ)言，列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)，關(guān)鍵單詞等問(wèn)題。通過(guò)閱讀材料可知這篇短文的時(shí)態(tài)主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)是第一人稱(chēng)。寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：做英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，只要注意認(rèn)真審題，分析體裁，確定時(shí)態(tài)；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞；為豐富文章的文采，可以多用一些復(fù)合句。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫(xiě)好后多讀多修改，我想一定會(huì)寫(xiě)出滿(mǎn)意的文章來(lái)。