Question

Sandy的班上來(lái)了一位英國(guó)同學(xué)，Sandy想向新同學(xué)介紹學(xué)校生活，但她覺(jué)得自己英語(yǔ)不夠好，你能幫助Sandy嗎？介紹的詞數(shù)在70詞左右，開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)，要求包括表格中的內(nèi)容并可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。

Name	Beijing Sunshine Secondary school
Teachers and students	be nice to ,  work hard and help each other
School life	wonderful and colourful have three lessons in the morning enjoy all kinds of food and drinks at school ,   at noon have two lessons in the afternoon after school，do all kinds of activities

The name of our school is Beijing Sunshine Secondary school. _______________________
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Answer 1

The name of our school is Beijing Sunshine Secondary school.Teachers and students here are all very nice to us.We work hard and help each other.Our school life is wonderful and colourful.
　　We have three lessons in the morning. Sandy likes maths very much because it is interesting. We have lunch at noon at scool.We enjoy all kinds of food and drinks there. We have two lessons in the afternoon. After school, We often do all kinds of activities.After that we go home.
　　In a word ,it’s a good place to live and study.I think you will like our school very much.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱(chēng)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)進(jìn)行敘述。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】有些句子使用了一些固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少.如: Teachers and students here are all very nice to us.；,it’s a good place to live and study；I think you will like it very much。還用了一些連詞如：because等，并且還注意了上下文的銜接，用了一些過(guò)渡詞或短語(yǔ)如：After that，In a word等，提醒學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理性。