Question

短文寫作。（本題14分）
每個(gè)人的成長都是一種蛻變的過程，從幼稚走向成熟，從逆境走向成功。請(qǐng)你用英語寫一篇80詞以上的短文，談?wù)勀阍诔砷L過程中所經(jīng)歷的最大的一次轉(zhuǎn)變。
內(nèi)容要求：
1. 變化前后分別是什么樣子的？
2. 促成你轉(zhuǎn)變的主要原因是什么？
3. 你為此變化付出了怎樣的努力？
注   意：短文中不允許出現(xiàn)與考生本人相關(guān)的真實(shí)姓名和校名等信息。
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Answer 1

   
From immaturity to maturity,from adversity to success, everyone’s growing progress is a kind of changing one. So  is mine .
At first,I was shy and I used to stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class. I only like playing computer games at home. Because I hated English ,my English mark is very low in the exam.Later ,a girl came to my class,and she changed my life.She became my best friend. She asked me to play outside with others .She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud ,to talk to her in English. I also practice English after school. Gradually, My English score was higher and higher. Now,I am a confident and outgoing girl .I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me .

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。主要寫其變化前后的樣子、促成其轉(zhuǎn)變的主要原因和其為此變化付出的努力。寫過去用一般過去時(shí)，轉(zhuǎn)變后的現(xiàn)在用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短詞為文章增色不少，首先是from ...to..., a kind of,used to,instead of,help with.等固定詞組，其次還運(yùn)用了at first，later,gradually, now等使層次更清晰。文章整體內(nèi)容飽滿，條理清晰，表達(dá)流暢。