Question

現(xiàn)在的學(xué)生紛紛感到功課多，學(xué)習(xí)負(fù)擔(dān)重，壓力大，內(nèi)心煩惱，于是不少學(xué)生特別是留守孩子(left-behind children)迷上網(wǎng)絡(luò)，在網(wǎng)上打游戲(computer game)，QQ聊天，寫(xiě)博客（Blog)，發(fā)微信（Wechat），交網(wǎng)友(Internet friend)，等等。由于不能把握好利弊，消耗很多時(shí)間，導(dǎo)致學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)下滑，結(jié)果更加煩惱……。你認(rèn)為怎樣放松才合適呢？請(qǐng)你根據(jù)提示，以L(fǎng)earn to relax yourself 為題寫(xiě)一篇短文。
寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)提示：
1. 學(xué)生壓力大及其表現(xiàn)；
2. 學(xué)會(huì)放松很重要；
3. 最適合我的放松方式；
4. 我的建議。  
寫(xiě)作要求：
短文的內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含所提示要點(diǎn)，語(yǔ)言要流暢，意思連貫，適當(dāng)增加情節(jié)；短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名、校名及地名；短文詞數(shù)在90詞左右。                        
Learn to relax yourself
                                                                                        
                                                                                          
                                                                                        
                                                                                        
                                                                                        
           

Answer 1

Learn to relax yourself
Now many students are under too much pressure. They always feel too tired to listen to teachers carefully in class.
It's important for students to relax. Only in this way can they study well and be healthy. Here are some different ways to relax yourself. For example, you can try sleeping enough, or you can listen to your favorite music. You can also read some books or do some sports. For me, I often hang out with my friends. 
While you are studying, don't forget to relax. You may study better after a good rest.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。題目所給要點(diǎn)比較具體，我們要做的就是用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，主語(yǔ)是第二人稱(chēng)，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少.如: under too much pressure太多的壓力之下。hang out 閑逛，They always feel too tired to listen to teachers carefully in class. 他們總是覺(jué)得太累了以致不能認(rèn)真聽(tīng)講。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.