Question

每個(gè)人都擁有夢(mèng)想，而實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想需要行動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所給圖片寫(xiě)一篇題為“Take action to realize our dreams”的英語(yǔ)短文。你的短文應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容:
(1) 描述圖片內(nèi)容，如情景、人物(Frank)、動(dòng)作等；并簡(jiǎn)要表達(dá)你的觀點(diǎn)；
(2) 談?wù)勀愕膲?mèng)想，及如何實(shí)現(xiàn)。

注意：
(1) 詞數(shù)90左右，短文首段已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
(2) 文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及自己的姓名。
Take action to realize our dreams
All of ue have dreams, but how can we realize our dreams?
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               

Answer 1

Take action to realize our dreams
All of us have dreams, but how can we realize our dreams?
From the pictures, we know that Frank dreamed to become a doctor when he was 15 years old. However, 45 years later he still dreams to be a doctor lying in bed. It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions. It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions I also have a dream. I wish to work as an engineer when I grow up. I will study hard every day and improve my abilities to get ready for my future job, so that I can make my dream come true. 

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)圖片，寫(xiě)一篇命題作文，題目為Take action to realize our dreams。為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想而采取行動(dòng)。通過(guò)審題可知，這篇作文應(yīng)主要有兩個(gè)方面的內(nèi)容，一是要把圖片中的人物、事件表達(dá)清楚，并且有自己對(duì)這件事情的看法。所以這就要求我們要仔細(xì)觀察圖片，弄清楚圖片主要想告訴我們什么，并用英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)；另一方面是談?wù)勛约旱膲?mèng)想，以及如何實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想，這一部分是開(kāi)放性的，可自由發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)好這篇作文的關(guān)鍵是要體現(xiàn)文章的中心，即想要實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想，必須要行動(dòng)起來(lái)，空想是不行的。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文。這篇作文的結(jié)構(gòu)主要分為三個(gè)部分。開(kāi)頭用一句話提出了問(wèn)題，這是題目中給好的開(kāi)頭，我們要順著這個(gè)話題向下說(shuō)；第二部分描寫(xiě)了圖片中的內(nèi)容，表達(dá)很準(zhǔn)確，很切題，說(shuō)出了關(guān)鍵所在；第三部分表達(dá)了自己的夢(mèng)想，以及如何實(shí)現(xiàn)這個(gè)夢(mèng)想。整個(gè)文章的意思還是很連貫的，表達(dá)的也比較流暢。有簡(jiǎn)單句，也有復(fù)合句。文章中的好的句型有we know that Frank dreamed to become a doctor when he was 15 years old、It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions、It is clear that he lives in the dream without any actions、I will study hard every day and improve my abilities to get ready for my future job, so that I can make my dream come true.等。