Question

某英語雜志征稿，要求根據(jù)下列提示信息寫一篇80詞左右的旅游方面的文章，文章的標(biāo)題及開頭已給出。
大多數(shù)人都喜歡旅游，因為旅游是一種很好的戶外活動。你可以欣賞自然美景、呼吸新鮮空氣、廣交朋友，重要的是你可以忘記疲勞，保持身體健康。當(dāng)然了，還有可能發(fā)生其他的事。你也可以寫寫你所遇到的有趣的事情。
Travelling
Most of the people like travelling because it is a very good outdoor activity. We may enjoy the
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Answer 1

Travelling
Most of the people like travelling because it is a very good outdoor activity. We may enjoy the nature when we go out for travelling, and we may enjoy the fresh air outside. The important thing is that we can forget that we are tired and the unhappy things. Travelling is good for our health.
However, sometimes, we may run into troubles when going travelling. For example, we can’t change the weather. It may be rainy when we are travelling. So we should prepare things well before the trip. And I hope everyone could enjoy himself during the travel.

試題分析：這是一篇開放式的提綱作文。本文要求按照所給的題目結(jié)合提示的內(nèi)容完成這篇旅游作文，我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來。寫作中要包含人們對旅游的態(tài)度、旅游的好處、旅游中的逸聞趣事以及旅游時所遇到的一些不確定因素等幾個方面進行陳述，表達(dá)出自己對旅游的觀點等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱主要是第一、三人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點說明】這篇短文簡明、扼要地闡明了不同人對旅游的看法，并包含了文中所要求的基本信息，并展開了合理的想象。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，包含狀語從句及連接詞和過渡詞的準(zhǔn)確使用為文章增色不少.如because it is a very good outdoor activity，when we go out for travelling，is good for，run into troubles，However, For example, So，And，我們在學(xué)習(xí)中要注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。