Question

現(xiàn)在電話運(yùn)用越來越普及，有大約57%中學(xué)生在使用手機(jī)，有的學(xué)生用手機(jī)來輔助學(xué)習(xí)，而有的學(xué)生則是用手機(jī)來上網(wǎng)，聊天，看小說等。你就學(xué)生使用手機(jī)現(xiàn)象以及利弊說一下個(gè)人看法。并建議學(xué)生正確使用手機(jī)。（部少于80詞）

Advantages(利)	Disadvantages(弊)
查詢新單詞，獲取國(guó)內(nèi)外新信息和新知識(shí)	過度地玩游戲，上網(wǎng)，影響睡眠和學(xué)習(xí)
打電話，聽音樂	和陌生人聊天，學(xué)壞習(xí)慣
拍有意義的圖片	看不健康的小說
在危險(xiǎn)中，向老師，家長(zhǎng)和警察求助	晚上熄燈后，使用手機(jī)發(fā)信息
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提示詞：search, ask for, information, knowledge, infiunce their study,chat with,habits,novels, correctly
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Answer 1

At present, mobile phones are become more and more popular. According to the report, about 57% students have mobile phones. Some students use them to search new words and ask for new information and knowledge. Some use phones to listen to music and take some interesting pictures. And they can call teachers, their parents or policemen when they are in need. But every coin has two sides. There are also some disadvantages brought by the phones. Some students use them to play games, which is bad for their sleeping and study. Besides, some students chat with strangers and learn bad habits. Some read unhealthy novels. They use phones to send message when it is time to sleep. So, I think everyone should use phones correctly. If you use it properly, you can benefit from it; otherwise, it will waste your time and ruin your life.

試題分析：這是篇命題作文，題中給出了寫作的要點(diǎn)信息，在作文中要盡力體現(xiàn)出這些要點(diǎn)。注意文章結(jié)構(gòu)的嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)和邏輯性。文中可使用一些承接性的句子和短語來加強(qiáng)文章的流暢性。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確流利；文中使用了很多有用的表達(dá)方式，如：According to根據(jù)；But every coin has two sides.但是每個(gè)硬幣都有兩面；listen to music聽音樂；Some students use them to play games, which is bad for their sleeping and study一些學(xué)生用來玩游戲，這對(duì)他們的睡眠和學(xué)習(xí)有不好的影響；which引導(dǎo)一個(gè)非限制性定語從句。