Question

春天是旅游的好季節(jié)，某中學校長要求各班同學就春游一事展開討論。討論的主題是：學校要不要組織學生春游。校長還要求班長就討論的情況用英語寫一封信給他。

假定你是某班班長李華，請你根據(jù)下列表格中的信息客觀地介紹討論情況。

注意：1、信的格式已為你寫好；    2、詞數(shù)：120字左右；

3、生詞：拓寬 broaden  負擔 burden

70％的學生贊成春游 

1、可以領(lǐng)略大自然的優(yōu)美風景；     

2、拓寬視野，增長知識；

3、呼吸新鮮空氣,有益于身體健康。

30％的學生反對春游 

1、時間緊，耽誤學習； 

2、增加父母經(jīng)濟負擔；  

3、擔心安全。

Dear Headmaster,

I’m writing to tell you the discussion we’ve had on whether the school should organize a spring outing for the students. _________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

Dear Headmaster,

     I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had on whether the school should organize a spring outing for the students.

     Opinions on the question are divided as follows: 70％ of the students think that the school should organize the spring outing. They believe that the spring outing can make them enjoy the beautiful scenery of nature, which can broaden our vision and fill us with more knowledge. They also say that the air in the open fields is fresher. What’s more, fresh air does a lot of good to our health.

     On the other hand, the rest don’t like the idea of going out for a spring outing. In their opinion, time is very precious, so they have to grasp every minute to work hard at their lessons. Traveling costs much money. In that case, it will add to their families’ burden. Above all, no one can be sure of the safety of every student.

     I’m looking forward to your reply.

                                                                                                          Yours truly

                                                           Li Hua

【解析】這是篇文字提綱式作文。寫這類文章時，應根據(jù)文字提綱投入、審慎、全面地進行審題。那么審題需要審出什么呢？

1.主題：書面表達題材不同，寫法就有所不同。要通過仔細觀察，認真分析，確定文章的主題，然后再圍繞主題進行寫作，以滿足 “切中題意”的要求。切忌跑題，這是是書面表達的大忌；

2.內(nèi)容：圍繞主題審查提煉要點，做到要點全面。避免丟三落四要點不全的現(xiàn)象的發(fā)生，還要防止畫蛇添足、節(jié)外生枝的現(xiàn)象的發(fā)生；

3.層次：最好是三大層次，忌一攬子式的表達，缺乏層次與條理；忌“擠牙膏”式，想到哪兒寫到哪兒，想到啥就寫啥，缺乏全局觀念。

4.格式：文體不同，格式也不同。書信有書信的格式，便條有便條的格式。同樣是通知，口頭通知與書面通知的格式也不相同。因此應根據(jù)不同的文體來確定寫作時所采用的相應格式。

5.人稱：要弄清表達時具體需要用什么人稱。