Question

假如你是李華，紅星中學(xué)的學(xué)生。2013年11月8日菲利賓遭受臺(tái)風(fēng)“海燕”襲擊，你們班組織了一次募捐活動(dòng)，幫助受災(zāi)地區(qū)的孩子重返校園。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格中的提示，向?qū)W校英文�？�投稿，介紹這次活動(dòng)情況。
提示詞：flea market 跳蚤市場(chǎng)
注意： 1. 文章開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好；
2. 添加適當(dāng)?shù)男畔�，使文章流暢�?br />3. 詞數(shù)不少于60。

內(nèi)  容
災(zāi)情	數(shù)以萬(wàn)計(jì)人民死亡，日常生活遭受?chē)?yán)重的破壞，很多孩子失去家庭和學(xué)校
活動(dòng)	組織班會(huì)，談?wù)撝г�辦法
	捐獻(xiàn)零用錢(qián)；組織跳蚤市場(chǎng)吸引學(xué)校跟多人募捐；獲得1萬(wàn)5千元
愿望	菲利賓人民早日戰(zhàn)勝災(zāi)難；孩子早日返校

As you know, Super typhoon Haiyan hit the eastern seaboard of the Philippines on November 8th, 2013…….
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Answer 1

As you know, Super typhoon Haiyan hit the eastern seaboard of the Philippines on November 8th, 2013. It caused great damages to people’s life. Millions of people were killed and thousands of children lost their families and schools.
On hearing the news, we all felt sorry for them. In order to show our pity, we held a class meeting last Monday to discuss how to help the people, especially the homeless children, in the disaster-stricken areas. At last, we came up with a great idea and a flea market was held in the school yard to appeal students to sell their old things and raise money. Many students took part in it and 1,500 Yuan was contributed. We did hope what we had done could express our great concerns, and it was also our wish that the victims could beat the storms earlier and the children could return to school soon

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