Question

閱讀下面的新聞報(bào)道，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文。

News report

Four young female college students died Friday after falling or jumping from a blazing room on the sixth floor of Shanghai Business School. Witness said one woman who jumped appeared to be aiming for bushes on the ground, but missed and landed on concrete. Witnesses said the other three were desperately trying to climb to another room amid roaring flames when they fell to the concrete paving.

The fire broke out in Room 602 of the seven-floor dormitory at the school’s downtown campus on Zhongshan Road West, just after 6 a.m. The fire was caused by an electrical device used to heat water. This had ignited flammable objects, police said late Friday afternoon. After receiving reports of the fire at 6:12 a.m, police, firefighters and ambulances were quickly on the scene. The fire was extinguished by 6:30 a.m., according to the school.

There is only one public toilet on each floor to get water and fire extinguishers in the dormitory were outdated, students said.  (SZ-Agencies)

[寫作內(nèi)容]

1． 以約30個(gè)詞概括這篇報(bào)道的主要內(nèi)容。

2． 針對(duì)此篇報(bào)道發(fā)表你對(duì)校園安全問題的看法, 至少包括以下內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，該部分詞數(shù)大約120個(gè)詞。

1）作為學(xué)生，我們?cè)撊绾卧谖＜钡臓顩r下保護(hù)好自己。

2）作為校方應(yīng)該采取哪些措施避免此類悲劇的發(fā)生。

[寫作要求]

1．作文中可使用實(shí)例或其它方法支持你的觀點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接    引用原文中的句子；

2．文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

Answer 1

After the tears, let’s focus on dorm safety

It was reported that on November 14, a tragedy occurred in a girls’ dormitory of the Shanghai Business School. Four girls jumped from their sixth-floor balcony in an attempt to escape a fire, and lost their lives.

People expressed their sympathy after hearing the tragedy. In my opinion, this incident reflects a lack of awareness of safety procedures. Both the college and the students are responsible for it. On one hand, we students should learn to deal with an emergency calmly in daily life. If there is a crisis, we are supposed to remain calm, ensure we are safe and then call for help.

On the other hand, it is the school authorities’ obligation to take safety measures for students living in a campus. Furthermore, more lectures should be held on safety to enhance students’ awareness of the issue.

In short, to avoid similar tragedies, both sides must work together.

                         

解析:

一、讀寫任務(wù)評(píng)分原則

1、本試題總分為25分，分兩部分給分 ① 短文概括5分 ② 主題寫作 20分。

2、強(qiáng)調(diào)內(nèi)容健康，觀點(diǎn)鮮明，說服力強(qiáng)，表述清晰�？蓞⒄臻喿x材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

3、評(píng)分時(shí)，選根據(jù)文章語(yǔ)言的規(guī)范、內(nèi)容的合適及篇章的連貫性初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。

4、語(yǔ)言規(guī)范：拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是語(yǔ)言規(guī)范的一個(gè)方面，評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。

5、如書寫較差，以至影響交際，將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。

二、內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)

1、短文概括： 

2、主題寫作：

    ① 歸納完整，表述清晰。

  ② 觀點(diǎn)鮮明，說服力強(qiáng)。