Question

假定你是西安某一中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。在一個(gè)英文網(wǎng)絡(luò)論壇上,你看到如下的一個(gè)帖子:
With the college entrance examination approaching, quite a few students are suffering mental problems. It does great harm to their study and health. What can we do to help those students?
請(qǐng)你回帖，要點(diǎn)如下： 
1. 列出某些學(xué)生心理焦慮的現(xiàn)象；      2. 提出應(yīng)該采取的對(duì)策（如積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對(duì)方法）。
注意：1. 文章的開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出（不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)），可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 詞數(shù)：120左右。
I agree with what you said. That many students have some mental problems also worries me.         
                                                                    

Answer 1

I agree with what you said. That many students have some mental problems also worries me. Some students are so worried about exams and academic achievements that they can’t fall asleep at night. Some are discouraged and tend to lose their confidence because of constant failure in exams. Others can’t get along well with their parents or with their classmates. They always feel stressed and easily get angry.
As a matter of fact, there’re many ways for us to deal with our mental problems. First of all, we can turn to our teachers for help, including our teacher of psychology. Second, communication is of vital importance. When we have a talk about our problems with our friends or classmates, we can feel greatly relieved. Last but not least, we need to develop a positive attitude towards our studies and our life. With the mental problems removed, we will keep in normal mental health and study happily.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱式作文，寫(xiě)好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫(xiě)作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文涵蓋了所有的要點(diǎn)，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，但是不乏好的詞組和句式：tend to往往，容易， get along well with 和…相處好，As a matter of fact事實(shí)上, deal with處理， turn to sb for help向某人求助，of vital importance 非常重要,I agree with what you said.這句話用了賓語(yǔ)從句， That many students have some mental problems also worries me. 這句話用了主語(yǔ)從句，Some students are so worried about exams and academic achievements that they can’t fall asleep at night. 這句話用了so…that…的句型，With the mental problems removed, we will keep in normal mental health and study happily.這句話用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，還有范文還使用了：First of all, Second, Last but not least,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。