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I am always very interested in the travelling. My rea?sons are quite simply and clear. If someone is not satisfied with my opinion,I shall be greatly surprising at his way of thinking. On the one hand,travelling increase our knowl?edge of the world. Only by travel can we visit local places of interest,listen to the story about the places and have a taste of different local foods. On the other hand,travel* ling is very good to our health. While we are travelling,we can breathe fresh air or exercise our bodies as well. Usually,people are often travelling are in good health. In a word,I sincerely hope everybody will grasp as much op?portunities as possible to travel.

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改正后：I am always very interested in  travelling. My rea?sons are quite simple and clear. If someone is not satisfied with my opinion,I shall be greatly surprised at his way of thinking. On the one hand,travelling increases our knowl?edge of the world. Only by travelling can we visit local places of interest,listen to the stories about the places and have a taste of different local foods. On the other hand,travel ling is very good for our health. While we are travelling,we can breathe fresh air and exercise our bodies as well. Usually,people that are often travelling are in good health. In a word,I sincerely hope everybody will grasp as many op?portunities as possible to travel.