Question

你所在的研究性學(xué)習(xí)小組對(duì)“中學(xué)生的健康狀況”進(jìn)行了一次調(diào)查，主要調(diào)查結(jié)果如下：

現(xiàn)狀	身體素質(zhì)逐年下降,肥胖人數(shù)增多
原因	學(xué)習(xí)緊張，體育鍛煉少,較少參加家務(wù)等體力勞動(dòng),飲食不均衡
專家建議	少上網(wǎng)聊天，保證睡眠每天運(yùn)動(dòng)一小時(shí),多吃蔬菜水果，不吃垃圾食品

【寫作內(nèi)容】

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以上信息寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，在英文校報(bào)上投稿。內(nèi)容包括：中學(xué)生的健康現(xiàn)狀、原因及專家建議。

【寫作要求】

注意：1.詞數(shù)：100左右.

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫.

Last week，we made a survey about middle school students' health condition.

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Answer 1

One possible version:

Last week，we made a survey about middle school students' health condition.

The survey shows that the general health of middle school students is declining year by year，with more people having the problem of being overweight. One of the reasons could be that they have a heavy load in their study so that they seldom take physical exercise or do labor work like housework. What's more，many of them don't have a balanced diet. To solve the problem，experts advise that we students should not chat on line so often in order to have enough sleep time and we should do sports for at least one hour a day. Besides，we'd better eat more fruits and vegetables and refuse junk foods.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是篇指導(dǎo)式提綱式書面表達(dá)，雖然限定了內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，學(xué)生最好采取要點(diǎn)1+1的方式把要點(diǎn)確定為5個(gè)，即在原因和專家建議兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行合理擴(kuò)展。人稱上調(diào)查結(jié)果即在現(xiàn)狀和原因兩方面上采用第三人稱，而專家建議部分多采用第一人稱；通篇均采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)；注意學(xué)以致用，以高中階段熟悉的知識(shí)點(diǎn)及恰當(dāng)?shù)倪^(guò)渡詞追求行文的流暢；用復(fù)雜多變的句式和一定的高級(jí)詞匯提升檔次；完整、準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔、規(guī)范地表述要點(diǎn)，避免逐字逐句翻譯。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】高級(jí)詞匯的運(yùn)用：decline，overweight等；銜接詞：What's more ，Besides等；復(fù)雜多變的句式：with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)；To solve the problem，in order to …（不定式表目的）； The survey shows that…(帶賓語(yǔ)從句的主從復(fù)合句)；One of the reasons could be that…(表語(yǔ)從句)；…so that they seldom take physical exercise…(結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句)；experts advise that we students should not…(“愿、建、命”的虛擬語(yǔ)氣)等既學(xué)以致用且處處亮點(diǎn)。

考點(diǎn)：提綱類書面表達(dá)