Question

寫作內(nèi)容：

假如你是李華，在美國留學(xué)。你母親今天下午要從國內(nèi)來看你，但你湊巧要去做個講座，故給你的朋友Peter留下字條請他下午三點半去機場接你母親。因Peter未見過你母親，請根據(jù)下表在字條中描述你母親的特征以便他辨認(rèn)。

 

age	around sixty
appearance	fat, short, gray hair, a long face
clothes	a white blouse, brown trousers
luggage	a yellow suitcase

 

寫作要求：

1．必須使用5個句子介紹全部所給內(nèi)容；

2．詞數(shù)：100詞左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：

句子結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性和復(fù)雜度；信息內(nèi)容的完整性和連貫性。

Sunday

Peter,

         I am very glad that my mother is coming this afternoon by air.

                                                      

                                                      

                                                      

                                                       

                                                      

                                                      

                                                      

                                                        

I will be grateful to you for your help.

Yours,

 

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

                                                      Sunday

Peter,

　　I am very glad that my mother is coming this afternoon by air. But I have to give a lecture and have no time to meet her. I am writing to ask you to meet my mother at the airport at 3:30 for me. As you have never seen her before, I will say something about her to help you recognize her. She is around sixty years old, fat and short, with a long face and gray hair. I have been told she is dressed in a white blouse and brown trousers and she will take a yellow suitcase with her.

　　I will be grateful to you for your help.

　　                                                  Yours,

 

 

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，包括以下幾個方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點。尤其是內(nèi)容要點要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，這是提綱作文，要點需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達的檔次和可讀性。因為只能使用5個句子表達全部的內(nèi)容。又要包括所有的要點，考生要多使用復(fù)雜句，一句話中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：I have been told she is dressed in a white blouse and brown trousers and she will take a yellow suitcase with her.就包含了幾個要點內(nèi)容。

考點：提綱作文。

點評：作文要層次清晰，要點全面，表達流暢，切合作文要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。文中使用一些極佳的詞語和句子為文章增色，使用高級詞匯及句型。