Question

中央號(hào)召創(chuàng)建節(jié)約型社會(huì)，可是在許多校園浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象嚴(yán)重。請(qǐng)你在班會(huì)課上發(fā)表演講，號(hào)召同學(xué)們從我做起，杜絕浪費(fèi)。
要點(diǎn)提示：
1. 不良習(xí)慣：浪費(fèi)水、電、食物等；
2. 危害：增加父母經(jīng)濟(jì)負(fù)擔(dān)，浪費(fèi)自然資源；
3. 制止浪費(fèi)的措施：（由自己設(shè)想）。
注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右，演講的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2.不要逐字翻譯，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫。
Dear friends,
May I have your attention, please? Now I’d like to make a speech here.
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Thanks for listening.

Answer 1

Dear friends,
May I have your attention, please? Now I’d like to make a speech here.
Nowadays, there is a lot of waste on campus. Many students fail to eat the foods they have ordered and throw away the leftovers into the dustbin. Others leave the lights on in the daytime. Still, water taps are sometimes left running. These bad habits not only lead to a waste of the world’s natural resources but also add to financial burden of their parents.
It is high time that we should deal with the problem. But what can we do? In my opinion, it is everyone’s duty to fight against waste. First, make it a rule to save food. Secondly, remember to turn off the lights and taps.
Let’s take action! I’m sure, with everyone doing their bit, we will make a difference.
Thanks for listening.

試題分析：本文的寫(xiě)作首先對(duì)現(xiàn)在校園的浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行描述。許多的學(xué)生不能吃完他們點(diǎn)的食物并且隨意的丟棄它們fail to eat the foods they have ordered and throw away the leftovers into the dustbin.一些學(xué)生白天不關(guān)燈Others leave the lights on in the daytime.還有水龍頭也不能及時(shí)的關(guān)掉water taps are sometimes left running.然后發(fā)表自己的看法，從兩方面進(jìn)行闡述，首先要將節(jié)約食物制定為規(guī)則，及時(shí)的關(guān)燈或是水龍頭。最后發(fā)表號(hào)召，相信如果每個(gè)人都行動(dòng)起來(lái)，肯定能帶來(lái)不同I’m sure, with everyone doing their bit, we will make a difference.文章中適當(dāng)使用虛擬語(yǔ)氣句式來(lái)增強(qiáng)文章的可讀性，如It is high time that we should deal with the problem.是做某事的關(guān)鍵時(shí)候了。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類(lèi)寫(xiě)作的文章較開(kāi)放式的文體，比較好寫(xiě)。學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，首先思路要清晰，要對(duì)所表達(dá)的句子通順的說(shuō)出來(lái)，遇到不會(huì)的要學(xué)會(huì)替換所用語(yǔ)，來(lái)達(dá)到同樣的意思。在每一篇作文中，對(duì)于表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)的句子，都要用上起承轉(zhuǎn)合的連詞來(lái)加強(qiáng)文章的層次感，適當(dāng)運(yùn)用俗語(yǔ)，如when it comes to當(dāng)談到，運(yùn)用平時(shí)常用的句式來(lái)使文章富有變化，表達(dá)地道得體。