Question

假如你是中學(xué)生華華。你在一個(gè)叫“家長(zhǎng)一百”的家長(zhǎng)論壇上看到如下內(nèi)容。請(qǐng)你寫一篇英語(yǔ)文章回復(fù)這位家長(zhǎng)。

    I'm the mother of a Senior 3 student. I want to send my child to study abroad. I believe that studying abroad will help him to better learn a foreign language, be independent and have a good future. But he is very upset and wants to study at home. We quarrel about this every day. Am I wrong?

寫作要點(diǎn)：1.表明自己的看法；

2.舉例說明以陳述自己的理由；

3.提出至少兩條建議。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于120詞；

2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)自己所在學(xué)校的名稱和班級(jí)同學(xué)的姓名。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

Hello,

    I am a Senior 3 student. For your trouble, I take the view that parents should not force us to do things. Here, I want to share a true story with you. One of my elder brother’s classmates was forced to study abroad to live up to his parents’ expectation. But in his inner heart, he just wanted to realize his dream together with his best friend in Beijing University. So he just felt left out in the foreign country and always out of place in that quite new environment. And at last his parents were cast down at what he obtained, not as well as his classmates at home.

    Actually, your son can be good at a foreign language when studying at home, because it all depends on the effort he puts into it. Independence does not only mean living alone, but it also refers to the ability to think about problems and solve them by himself. As long as he values his independence, whether he studies abroad or not, he can be independent. Only when your son is happy about his studies can he study efficiently. Then, he will have a good future ahead of him.

So I suggest that you respect your son’s choice and that you not make him give up his dreams. Just remember: When children do what they are interested in, they will put more time and effort into it.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇開放式作文，就家長(zhǎng)與孩子對(duì)是否出國(guó)留學(xué)的不同態(tài)度給家長(zhǎng)寫一封回信。寫作時(shí)不僅要注意：①開頭要點(diǎn)明寫信所要談的話題；②舉例并比較詳細(xì)的敘述；③陳述自己對(duì)問題看法；④提出至少兩條建議。而且還要注意寫作時(shí)要準(zhǔn)確地運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)：舉例用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)；陳述自己對(duì)問題看法以及提出建議時(shí)要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來時(shí)。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文運(yùn)用了典型的三段式：話題與舉例為第一段；第二段陳述自己對(duì)問題看法；第三段則提出了自己的意見。所以范文脈絡(luò)清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊；非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞(force us to do things ,want to share a true story with you, to study abroad to live up to his parents’ expectation, felt left out, mean living alone)、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)(was forced, were cast down)、復(fù)合句(同位語(yǔ)從句I take the view that parents should not force us to do things；定語(yǔ)從句because it all depends on the effort he puts into it；狀語(yǔ)從句As long as he values his independence；賓語(yǔ)從句So I suggest that you respect your son’s choice and that you not make him give up his dreams.)、倒裝句(Only when your son is happy about his studies can he study efficiently.)、省略句(when studying at home)的運(yùn)用使范文亮點(diǎn)紛呈；高級(jí)詞匯的運(yùn)用更是錦上添花：live up to，inner heart，cast down，refers to ,put more time and effort into it等等。范文恰到好處地運(yùn)用了連接詞(But，So ，And，Actually, not only … but，So )使文章連貫緊密，讀起來朗朗上口。

考點(diǎn)：開放式作文