Question

基礎(chǔ)寫作 (滿分15分)
以下是“廣州市文物保護(hù)研討會(huì)”的有關(guān)信息:
時(shí)間: 2011年12月25日.
地點(diǎn): 廣東省博物館
主辦單位: 廣州市文化局
與會(huì)人員: 歷史學(xué)家, 文物專家, 廣州市政府有關(guān)負(fù)責(zé)人等.
會(huì)議內(nèi)容: 廣州市的哪些文物應(yīng)該要保護(hù)以及如何保護(hù)這些文物.
會(huì)議成果: 1) 確定了一系列需要保護(hù)的文物;
2) 明確了政府的職責(zé)以及非政府組織的職責(zé);
與會(huì)者特別建議: 政府應(yīng)該號(hào)召全民參與到保護(hù)文物的行動(dòng)中來。
*研討會(huì) conference    *主辦 sponsor  *廣州市文化局 Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs   *專家 expert    *非政府組織 non-governmental organization
[寫作內(nèi)容]
請寫一篇有關(guān) “廣州市文物保護(hù)研討會(huì)”的通訊稿, 內(nèi)容包括: 舉辦時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、主辦單位、與會(huì)人員、會(huì)議內(nèi)容以及會(huì)議成果和特別建議。
[寫作要求]
只能用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部內(nèi)容
[評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章連貫

Answer 1

A conference on the protection of the cultural relics in Guangzhou was held in Guangdong Museum on December 25^th 2011. This conference was sponsored by Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs and present at the conference were historians, experts in cultural relics and the leaders concerned from the Guangzhou Government. This conference aimed to decide which cultural relics in Guangzhou should be protected and how to protect them. With all the efforts of the participants, the conference has not only identified a series of cultural relics which need to be protected but also has made clear the role of the government and that of the non-governmental organizations. In addition, the participants of the conference suggest that the government should get all citizens involved in the protection of the cultural relics.

解析寫作前首先要看清楚要求，題目要求寫“廣州市文物保護(hù)研討會(huì)”的通訊稿,只能寫五句話，而且要包括內(nèi)容包括: 舉辦時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、主辦單位、與會(huì)人員、會(huì)議內(nèi)容以及會(huì)議成果和特別建議。在構(gòu)建文章時(shí)要注意信息的整合，如：時(shí)間地點(diǎn)、主辦單位與會(huì)人員可以在一句話中進(jìn)行交代。例如范文中第一句A conference on the protection of the cultural relics in Guangzhou was held in Guangdong Museum on December 25^th 2011.就把時(shí)間地址巧妙地柔和在了一起，但要注意先交代地點(diǎn)，再交代時(shí)間，第二句話This conference was sponsored by Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs and present at the conference were historians, experts in cultural relics and the leaders concerned from the Guangzhou Government.里面既有主辦單位，又有與會(huì)人員，而且用了倒裝句。在表示目的的句子中文章用了aimed to詞組表達(dá)了此意。第四句話是個(gè)長句：With all the efforts of the participants, the conference has not only identified a series of cultural relics which need to be protected but also has made clear the role of the government and that of the non-governmental organizations，用了not only…but also…連接了兩個(gè)并列部分，信息量很大，而且這里that的用法也很好，指代前面的role. 最后的建議中，用了In addition, the participants of the conference suggest that the government should get all citizens involved in the protection of the cultural relics.其中的get…involved in…/in the protection of都是很常見的詞組，恰如其分的表達(dá)了句意。