Question

短文寫作 (滿分30分)

假設(shè)你將參加某英語雜志社開展的一次征文活動，征文的內(nèi)容要求你在電視、手機(jī)和網(wǎng)絡(luò)三者中，放棄其中的一個并陳述理由。請你以“Which would you give up: TV, cell, or Web?” 為題，寫一篇英語短文。

注意：1.詞數(shù)120字左右

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Which would you give up: TV, cellphone or Web

We are now living in an information age, ……

 

Answer 1

【答案】

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Which would you give up: TV, cell phone or Web

There is no denying that we are now living in an information age, in which TV, cell phones and the Web are widely used. It seems that many people cannot enjoy themselves without them. However, if you had only one to choose, which did you give up?

As far as I’m concerned, if I had to abandon one of them, I would turn off the TV rather than switch off my cell phone or cut off the Internet. I could do without TV because few shows take my fancy and there’re too many commercials. Besides, most programs on TV are also available by surfing the internet. In addition, a TV set is not as easy to carry as a mobile phone or a laptop, as a result of which you can’t make full use of it whenever you want to.

As for cell phones and the Web, they are more necessary to me. I need a cell phone to keep in touch with my friends and family, and almost all information can be gathered on the Internet.

All the things considered, I’d like to choose cell phone or web rather than TV.

【解析】

試題分析：英語寫作首先要仔細(xì)審題，確定人稱，時態(tài)，文體。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要全面，上下段要使用連接詞做到連貫。我們在寫作中應(yīng)當(dāng)遵循語言表述的經(jīng)濟(jì)原則，即用盡可能少的形式表達(dá)盡可能多的語義內(nèi)容，力求簡潔精練。 由于對英語詞匯了解和掌握有限，再加上母語對我們思維的影響，寫作中常會出現(xiàn)贅詞和冗繁的問題。 贅詞是指使用了不必要的詞語。這些詞語只是用來“填空、充數(shù)”的，沒有增加任何新的意義；冗繁是指對讀者來說不十分必要的信息，或句子中重復(fù)的詞語。 贅詞和冗繁使句子結(jié)構(gòu)松松垮垮，使文章冗長、拖沓。因此，我們應(yīng)該在用詞上仔細(xì)揣摩，準(zhǔn)確清晰地表達(dá)我們的思想，剔除冗詞贅語，使文章言簡意賅。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。

點(diǎn)評：考生要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，盡可能的使用較復(fù)雜的句子結(jié)構(gòu)，盡量使用高級詞匯以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。比如would turn off the TV rather than ，make full use of，whenever you want to，keep in touch with�？忌�注意使用過渡詞或者過渡句來使文章讀起來比較流暢。比如As far as I’m concerned，…As for cell phones and the Web,…In addition.