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【題目】Directions:Write an English composition in over 120 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.請描述圖片內(nèi)容并談?wù)勀愕母惺堋?/span>

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Answer 1

【答案】One possible version：

As you can see, there are two figures in the picture given above. One is a fat woman who is working out, maybe trying to lose weight. The other is a tiny student carrying a big schoolbag which looks heavy and the student is saying to the woman: “If you carry the schoolbag for me, I’m sure you’ll lose weight.”

Probably the picture makes many people laugh, but as a student, I feel bad. Because this is what we experience everyday. I mean we students have too much homework to do and too many things to carry. It seems that heavy tasks have brought tremendous pressure to both our mind and body. Representing all the students, I sincerely hope the burden of learning can be reduced and then we shall fly like a bird.

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于議論文，要求學(xué)生描述所給圖片內(nèi)容并抒發(fā)自己的感想。

第一步：立意

體裁：議論文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時。

主題：學(xué)生的課業(yè)負(fù)擔(dān)過重，應(yīng)適當(dāng)減負(fù)。

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1.描述圖片內(nèi)容（people in the picture and their activities）

2.表達(dá)感想

1）對照自己的經(jīng)歷和體會。（experience like this）

2）對這一現(xiàn)象的看法和感受。（feeling about it）

3) 提出建議或倡議來解決問題。（solution to solve the problem）

第二步:列提綱 （重點(diǎn)詞組）

work out; lose weight; carry; too much; be stressed out; reduce; be sure about; burst into laughter; relieve pressure.

第三步：連詞成句

1. A fat woman is working out to lose weight.

2. A thin student is carrying a large schoolbag and it looks heavy.

3. Students have too much homework and their school bags are always heavy.

4. Under much pressure, we feel stressed out.

5. We feel exhausted from body to soul.

6. We hope school and teacher can relieve some pressure on us.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤色修改