Question

3．我們都熱愛(ài)自己的母校，為自己是其中一員而自豪．但也許它在校園環(huán)境、課業(yè)負(fù)擔(dān)、校服式樣、課外活動(dòng)、作息時(shí)間等諸多方面并不盡如人意．請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇短文，談?wù)勀感４嬖诘膯?wèn)題并提出合理化建議．
寫(xiě)作要求：
1．問(wèn)題和建議至少兩條
2．不必自擬標(biāo)題
3．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名和地名
4．詞數(shù)不少于80．
I love my school，I‘m proud of studying at the school．But I think thereare some problems．As we known，nowadays more and more attention is paid to campus safety，including bicycle theft，traffic accidents and students'getting injured in school．It is directly related to the healthy growth of young students and the happiness of millions of families．How to protect us students？
There are several ways．First，we should raise our safety awareness---to take care of ourselves in school．Second，traffic regulations must be observed．Besides，we should be more careful in taking physical exercise．Last but not least，we should always stay calm when having trouble with other students．We should solve the problem by communicating rather than quarrel and fight．
All teachers and students should make joint efforts to create a safe campus environment．．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
Last but not least，we should always stay calm when having trouble with other students最后也是最重要的，當(dāng)我們和其他學(xué)生有不快的時(shí)候我們應(yīng)該一直保持冷靜．
 when having trouble with other students=when we have etrouble with other students省略句的使用．
【高分句型二】
We should solve the problem by communicating rather than quarrel and fight我們應(yīng)該通過(guò)交流溝通解決問(wèn)題而不是吵架．
rather than 而不是

解答 I love my school，I‘m proud of studying at the school．But I think there are  some problems．As we known，nowadays more and more attention is paid to campus safety，including bicycle theft，traffic accidents and students'getting injured in school．It is directly related to the healthy growth of young students and the happiness of millions of families．（問(wèn)題） How to protect us students？
There are several ways．First，we should raise our safety awareness---to take care of ourselves in school．Second，traffic regulations must be observed．Besides，we should be more careful in taking physical exercise．Last but not least，we should always stay calm when having trouble with other students．【高分句型一】We should solve the problem by communicating rather than quarrel and fight．【高分句型二】（建議）
All teachers and students should make joint efforts to create a safe campus environment．

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