Question

王明是我的最好朋友，有許多好習(xí)慣，每天早上鍛煉半小時(shí)，每天喝牛奶吃蔬菜。
周末經(jīng)常幫助他爸做家務(wù)，幾乎不玩電腦游戲。他喜歡看新聞節(jié)目。他認(rèn)為能從新聞節(jié)目中知道世界上發(fā)生的事情。
去年夏天，他和同學(xué)一起去了北京，參觀了長(zhǎng)城，故宮，天安門廣場(chǎng)。他最喜歡長(zhǎng)城，以為長(zhǎng)城非常美麗。他不喜歡北京的食物，
他覺得北京的食物沒有武漢的食物好吃。

Answer 1

 
My best friend
My best friend Wang Ming has may good habits, such as running in the morning for half an hour. Besides that, he also drinks milk and eats vegetables every day. As a result, he is in a good health.
On weekends, he often helps his father do housework. He hardly plays computer games in his daily life. Also, he enjoys watching news on TV. It’s because he thinks he can know what’s happening in the world.
Last summer, he went to Beijing with his classmates. They visited the Great Wall, the Place Museum and Tian’anmen Square. His favourite place of interest is the Great Wall. He thinks it’s not only one of the seven wonders in the world but very beautiful. He doesn’t like Beijing food. He thinks food in Beijing is less delicious than that in Wuhan.
This is my best friend.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，而且提供材料充分詳細(xì)。我們要做的就是用地道且完美的語句將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來。根據(jù)寫作的基本步驟，在認(rèn)真詳細(xì)審題的審題之后。先在心中打好腹稿，確定本文的人稱，時(shí)態(tài)，要點(diǎn)，然后再動(dòng)筆。在不遺漏要點(diǎn)的基礎(chǔ)上，適當(dāng)加以發(fā)揮和選取精美的結(jié)構(gòu)和語句。根據(jù)材料提供的內(nèi)容可知，由于本文屬于一篇人物介紹性文章，應(yīng)選取一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱采用第三人稱單數(shù)來描述我的朋友。在寫作中注意開頭和結(jié)尾的設(shè)計(jì)。不同事件之間應(yīng)采用合適的連詞，保證文章渾然一體，可讀性強(qiáng)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇文章在開篇使用了such as ,besides, as a result 無形中使讀者有一種想讀的沖動(dòng)。在對(duì)朋友日常生活的描述中，表語從句It’s because he thinks he can know what’s happening in the world.的使用又使文章增色不少。在第三段對(duì)去年夏天一次經(jīng)歷的回憶中。作者在He thinks it’s not only one of the seven wonders in the world but very beautiful.一句中采用了連詞not only…but（also）…的用法，直接體現(xiàn)了作者的組織運(yùn)用語言的能力。可見，在平時(shí)的日常學(xué)習(xí)中，注意總結(jié)和扎實(shí)基本功對(duì)寫作是至關(guān)重要的。