Question

假如你在一家旅行社做了一份暑期工，你們正準(zhǔn)備組織一批游客去北京觀光，請(qǐng)為即將到來(lái)的國(guó)慶節(jié)寫(xiě)一份廣告宣傳，字?jǐn)?shù)在80詞左右。

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要求：1. 至少要列舉3條北京吸引游客的方面。2條理清楚、語(yǔ)句通順。3. 請(qǐng)將已給出的題目和開(kāi)頭抄寫(xiě)到答題卡上， 不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Travel Spotlight                          

For the coming National Day, where would you like to travel? Have you ever dreamed of taking a trip to Beijing ?__________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

For the coming National Day, where would you like to travel? Have you ever dreamed of taking a trip to Beijing ?

Beijing is the capital of China, and it’s also one of the liveliest cities all over the world. It has many beautiful sights and places of interest, including the Great Wall, the Summer Palace ,Tian’anmen Square and so on.. Although it doesn’t have any beaches, you still have a lot to do there. What’s more, the weather there is cool and sunny, and Beijingers are really friendly. They are always willing to help others. In a word, I’m sure you will have a wonderful time there.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。題目中已經(jīng)明確了所要寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要緊扣題意，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)。在列舉內(nèi)容時(shí)，可以使用the first，second等詞，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)更清楚，邏輯更緊密。另外，要注意句子的完整性和表達(dá)的清晰性。在結(jié)尾可以用概括性的語(yǔ)句來(lái)結(jié)束。

【亮點(diǎn)分析】

這篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰完整，緊扣題意，邏輯緊密。文中使用了很多連詞，例如and, Although盡管；What’s more另外；in a wordy總而言之等，使句子之間更通暢。文中也出現(xiàn)一些復(fù)雜的句式，例如It has many beautiful sights and places of interest, including the Great Wall, the Summer Palace ,Tian’anmen Square and so on..那里有很多漂亮景點(diǎn)和有趣的地方，包括長(zhǎng)城，故宮，天安門(mén)廣場(chǎng)等等；including包括。 Although it doesn’t have any beaches, you still have a lot to do there.雖然那里沒(méi)有沙灘，但你還是有很多事情可做。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。