Question

假如你是林思，要去澳大利亞的Melbourne High留學(xué)，需要在當(dāng)?shù)卣乙粋�(gè)寄宿家庭（host family).請(qǐng)按要求寫(xiě)一封約100詞的電子郵件給寄宿家庭中介公司的經(jīng)理Mr. Porter.
內(nèi)容包括：（1）簡(jiǎn)單介紹自己的個(gè)人情況，如語(yǔ)言，愛(ài)好等
（2）提出自己的對(duì)寄宿家庭的要求（如下表所示）

Family member	English speaker ,no smoker
Housing	Near the school,a bedroom with a bathroom
Others	Cooking by myself……

 
注意：郵件需涵蓋以上所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出（不計(jì)入總詞匯）；文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名等相關(guān)信息。
Dear Mr Porter,
My name is Li Si,__________________________________
_________________________________________________________________________________________
Look forward to your early reply.
Best wishes,
Lin Si

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Porter,
My name is Lin Si. I’m a sixteen-year-old boy from China. I’m going to study in Melbourne High.
I like making friends. English is my favorite subject but I’m weak in spoken English. That’s why I want to find a host family who are native English speakers. In this way, I will have more chances to practice English in daily life. I hope it’s a family without smokers. Moreover, it’s better if the family lives within a twenty-minute walk from my school and provides a bedroom with a bathroom. As for the meals, I’d like to cook by myself because I’m fond of cooking.
Look forward to your early reply.
Best wishes,
Lin Si

試題分析：這篇作文給我們?cè)O(shè)置的情景是以林思的身份寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，因?yàn)槟阋�去澳大利亞留學(xué)，要在當(dāng)?shù)卣乙粋�(gè)寄宿家庭，給寄宿家庭的中介Porter現(xiàn)在寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。在這篇作文中應(yīng)該主要有兩個(gè)內(nèi)容，一是介紹一下自己的基本情況；二是介紹自己對(duì)寄宿家庭的要求，這一部分在表格中給我們列舉了出來(lái)。我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)將這兩部分內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。當(dāng)然我們還可以對(duì)這兩部分內(nèi)容進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充，使文章的內(nèi)容更具體，更豐富。這篇文章我們應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第一人稱來(lái)敘述。注意語(yǔ)句之間的連接，多使用好的句型和短語(yǔ)，以使表達(dá)流暢。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。短文的作者按照題目的要求寫(xiě)了一封完整的電子郵件，內(nèi)容豐富，表達(dá)流暢。首先作者先介紹了自己的一些情況，如I’m a sixteen-year-old boy from China、I like making friends. English is my favorite subject but I’m weak in spoken English等；然后作者提出了對(duì)寄宿家庭的要求，如I want to find a host family who are native English speakers、Moreover, it’s better if the family lives within a twenty-minute walk from my school and provides a bedroom with a bathroom等。短文中使用了比較多的短語(yǔ)和句式，如That’s why I want to find a host family who are native English speakers.中，表語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句的使用；in this way, I will have more chances to practice English in daily life中，句型have chance to do sth.；短語(yǔ)moreover、as for等。