Question

以“這就是我”為題寫一篇80—100詞左右的自我介紹。

要求： 1、從前的我…… ；2、現(xiàn)在的我…… ；3、參考詞匯：used to , but now

(提示：從外貌，性格，愛好興趣，活動(dòng)等方面介紹。)

提示：1. 要有表明自己觀點(diǎn)的句子。2. 書寫工整，句式規(guī)范，條理清楚，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號使用正確。3. 短文中應(yīng)包括提示內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、地名。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

When I was a junior high school student, I was a short and fat girl. I was shy and afraid of being laughed by others. So I used to stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class. I only like playing computer games at home. My English was very poor, because I hated English.

Later, a girl with long hair came to my class, and she changed my life. She made friend with me. She asked me to exercise with her. She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud, to talk to her with English.

Now，when I am a junior high school student and I am a confident and outgoing girl . I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me. I am tall and slim. I don’t hate English any more; on the contrary, I can talk with foreigners in English. I often go to the English corner in order to practice my oral English. 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文作者分三部分別寫過去的她，為什么轉(zhuǎn)變以及現(xiàn)在的她 。 寫過去的她和轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)時(shí)用一般過去時(shí)，寫現(xiàn)在的她用現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，例如by doing ,used to, be afraid of, play with ,make friends, in order to 等短語，以及如hate和like, tall和short ，fat 和slim，shy 和outgoing等反義詞作對比，文中還用到了狀語從句When  I was a junior high school student, when I am a junior high school student ，I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me 。文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。