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最近，洛陽小伙扶摔倒老人被訛一事引起了社會的廣泛關(guān)注，人們都在議論還該不該去做好事，幫助他人。而“Positive Energy”一詞早已對我們中國人產(chǎn)生了很大影響，因此，很多人并不會因此就不去做好事了。瞧！你身邊就有很多助人為樂的同學(xué)，他們的事例值得我們學(xué)習(xí)。請根據(jù)下面表格信息給學(xué)校�？瘜懸黄�短文，談?wù)勆磉叺暮萌撕檬拢�號召大家向他們學(xué)習(xí)。詞數(shù)60—80（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）

Who they are	What they usually do to help others
Liu Chang	make our school beautiful (clean the classroom..)
Li Bing	help other students with their studies…
Zhang Ling	help the people in trouble (cheer others up…)
…	…

Dear Editor,
In our school,some students are always thinking more of others and ready to help them.I am moved deeply.Here is what they usually do.
Liu Chang is a very good student.                                                             
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                   
I hope everyone can learn from them and do something for others.
Yours, 
Mark 

Answer 1

Dear Editor，
　　In our school,some students are always thinking more of others and are ready to help them.I’m moved deeply.Here is what they usually do．
　　Liu Chang is a very good student．She often picks up rubbish and cleans the classroom to make our school more beautiful.LiBing studies well.So he often helps other students with their studies.We all like him.ZhangLing is outgoing.She likes cheering others up.If we are sad,she always talks with us and tries to make us happy.She is also helpful,She likes helping people who are in trouble.She is very popular in our school．
　　I hope everyone can learn from them and do something for others．
Yours, 
Mark

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì)，我們要做的就是用正確的英語把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來。動筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。行文注意時態(tài)語時間狀語的搭配及主謂一致問題。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點說明】這篇短文覆蓋了所有要點內(nèi)容，語句自然流暢。同時使用了一些的常用句式和短語，為文章增色不少。如： make our school more beautiful讓我們的學(xué)校變得更美麗，helps other students with their studies幫助其他同學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)，She likes helping people who are in trouble她喜歡幫助有困難的人，還有cheer sb up使某人振奮起來，talk with sb 和某人交談，be helpful樂于助人等。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意積累，牢記一些常用句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。