Question

文段表達(dá)（10分）根據(jù)中文大意和英文提示詞語(yǔ)，寫出意思連貫、符合邏輯，不少于50詞的短文。所給英文提示詞語(yǔ)僅供選用。

每個(gè)人的一生都有很多第一次，比如第一次外出旅游，第一次說(shuō)英語(yǔ)，第一次學(xué)畫畫…… English Online雜志開辦了以“My first time to ….”為主題的專欄討論，請(qǐng)你寫一篇短文參加交流，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面的問(wèn)題完成短文。

提示詞語(yǔ)：first, experience, share, succeed, proud, because…

What was your first experience? What happened to you during your experience? How did you feel and why did you have that feeling?

My first time to

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

Everyone has many first-time experiences and so do I. Now I’d like to share with you my first time to cook.

One Sunday my parents went out. I felt hungry at noon, so I decided to cook for myself. I tried to cook some vegetables, but the pot caught fire when I put some oil into it. Luckily, my mother came back and helped me put down the fire.

Although I did not succeed in my first cooking, I still felt proud of myself because it’s a start of trying something new–now I’ve been quite a good cook.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以Where is your time going?為題寫一篇作文，即你的時(shí)間都去哪了。在題目中給了我們這篇短文的寫作提綱，主要包括三部分的內(nèi)容。一是過(guò)去都把時(shí)間花費(fèi)在哪些地方了，如沉迷于電視劇、做沒玩沒了的作業(yè)，另外還需自己再補(bǔ)充一條；二是現(xiàn)在把時(shí)間都花費(fèi)在哪兒了，如閱讀、鍛煉和旅行。同樣自己再列舉一個(gè)例子；最后是想象未來(lái)會(huì)把時(shí)間花費(fèi)在什么地方，如家庭、工作、慈善事業(yè)等。提綱雖然已經(jīng)列好，但是很多內(nèi)容都需要我們自己去充實(shí)，讓它變得完整、合理，內(nèi)容豐富，這就需要花費(fèi)我們的想象力，以及我們平時(shí)積累的知識(shí)。另外，寫作時(shí)，還需注意語(yǔ)句間的銜接，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇比較不錯(cuò)的作文。作者從過(guò)去、現(xiàn)在和將來(lái)三個(gè)方面，分成三段，講述了自己的時(shí)間都花費(fèi)在哪了，層次非常的清晰。短文中需要作者自己補(bǔ)充的內(nèi)容完成得也不錯(cuò)。如Sometimes I would play computer games. It was a good way to kill time；I also learn to do something new, for example, cooing. Because I want enjoy the satisfaction of eating my own meals等。這些內(nèi)容都比較貼合文章的需要，意思也很連貫。文章中還用了一些比較好的句型，如In the past, I was addicted in watching TV series and spent a lot of time on it、When I am free, I go traveling to see the natural beauties of the world、I can do my part to make the world a better place to live in等。

考點(diǎn)：提綱類作文。