Question

假設你是張麗，是家住四川蘆山地震災區(qū)林娜的筆友。她給你發(fā)來了一封電子郵件，請看后給她回復，針對她的問題給她一些建議，并談談你的想法。

Dear Zhang Li, I have been so sad these days. As you know, an earthquake happened in my hometown and both my parents died. Though the government gives us much help, my little sister and I cried every night because of missing, and I don’t want to learn anything. I find it hard to talk with the people around. Life is dark for me without parents’ love! What should I do?  I really need your help. Yours, Lin Na

 

Dear Lin Na, I’m so sorry to hear the sad news. I understand you . _______________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________ I hope what I said can help you.  Yours, Zhang Li

 

Answer 1

A possible version:
I understand you . Everyone need parents’ love. But when they leave the world, we must learn to take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely.
So please stop crying and try your best to study harder to get a better future. Besides, you should take good care of your sister and help her live a happy life.  What’s more, it’s useful to talk about your problems with the people around you. And my parents and I can also help you.
I think it’s important for you to be strong and brave. I believe you will be better soon.

解析試題分析：本文的寫作按照文章的要求從三方面進行闡述，首先表達對她的遭遇表示理解，說明我們鼻血學會照顧好我們自己勇敢地面對困難take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely. 然后提出一些建議，如不要哭泣努力學習來爭取一個好的未來stop crying and try your best to study harder to get a better future.照顧你的妹妹take good care of your sister，都與周圍的人進行交流it’s useful to talk about your problems with the people around you.最后表達自己的想法（如堅強和勇敢是非常重要的it’s important for you to be strong and brave.）和希望I believe you will be better soon.
考點：提綱類寫作
點評：本文難度不大，一般都有話可說，寫作過程中寫作條理性要把握好，對于自己所提出的建議，寫的過程中通過變換句式和用詞上來提高語言的美度。在一件事情寫完后要用上表關系的連接詞，或平時積累的各類表遞進、并列的連詞來是文章富于活力。在平時的練習中要多去背誦范文，對表達好的句子，短語要進行積累，并默寫，考試前再集中看一下，這樣做到有備無患。